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marketing099
08-28-2006, 05:57 PM
‘Less Fatigued at the end of the work day’

This is currently the tag-line for a company selling a shoe that makes you "less fatigued" at the end of the day compared to other sheos but we want to improve that. It's considered a shoe for professionals... who stand up all day

We are trying to remove the "fatigued" element from it all together.

Any suggestions?

Tuesday Island
08-29-2006, 02:53 AM
‘Less Fatigued at the end of the work day’

This is currently the tag-line for a company selling a shoe that makes you "less fatigued" at the end of the day compared to other sheos but we want to improve that. It's considered a shoe for professionals... who stand up all day

We are trying to remove the "fatigued" element from it all together.

Any suggestions?

i agree that the word "less fatigued" has to go. its too negative and still implies that you will be fatigued - just not as much as you would without the shoe.

.mmm - what about somthing a little more positive like "end the day with a bounce in your step" - i suppose that is a little silly. If this tag line is to be used in a search engine campaign you may be better off trying to quantify the degree of fatigue reduction. "studies show a 30% reduction in fatigue"

good luck -

evilgreenmonkey
08-29-2006, 03:15 AM
Less Work, More Sole

:D

marketing099
08-29-2006, 10:40 AM
I like all of the suggestions....

Less work, more sole :) ha!!! that rocks

i especially like the idea about using research to "shoe" a 30% decline in fatigue...

+1!

Tuesday Island
08-31-2006, 01:51 AM
good luck - marketing is hard work!

all the best