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marketing099
08-28-2006, 05:57 PM
‘Less Fatigued at the end of the work day’
This is currently the tag-line for a company selling a shoe that makes you "less fatigued" at the end of the day compared to other sheos but we want to improve that. It's considered a shoe for professionals... who stand up all day
We are trying to remove the "fatigued" element from it all together.
Any suggestions?
Tuesday Island
08-29-2006, 02:53 AM
‘Less Fatigued at the end of the work day’
This is currently the tag-line for a company selling a shoe that makes you "less fatigued" at the end of the day compared to other sheos but we want to improve that. It's considered a shoe for professionals... who stand up all day
We are trying to remove the "fatigued" element from it all together.
Any suggestions?
i agree that the word "less fatigued" has to go. its too negative and still implies that you will be fatigued - just not as much as you would without the shoe.
.mmm - what about somthing a little more positive like "end the day with a bounce in your step" - i suppose that is a little silly. If this tag line is to be used in a search engine campaign you may be better off trying to quantify the degree of fatigue reduction. "studies show a 30% reduction in fatigue"
good luck -
evilgreenmonkey
08-29-2006, 03:15 AM
Less Work, More Sole
:D
marketing099
08-29-2006, 10:40 AM
I like all of the suggestions....
Less work, more sole :) ha!!! that rocks
i especially like the idea about using research to "shoe" a 30% decline in fatigue...
+1!
Tuesday Island
08-31-2006, 01:51 AM
good luck - marketing is hard work!
all the best